急~~急~~~急~~~哪位高手帮我修改一下英语作文！

大致改了下语法和习惯用语：
I’m very happy to introduce you to my dream room. I hope that one day it would be become real. My dream room doesn’t need to be too big. The color of the wall is yellow, since it is my favorite color. Yellow can give people a warm feeling, which likes the Sun, or a lamp in darkness. In the bedroom, there is a beautiful light made from crystal. I like things made from crystal, especially crystal lamp. It can give me a world full of magic. In this world, I will also buy a lot of cups with different kinds of materials, sizes, and colors. It makes me so excited. I will leave the biggest space for my clothes. In this space, I will make four wardrobes for my clothes, and a big mirror with them. I will use a wall to make a cabinet for shoes, and put all my shoes. There is a beautiful toilet (toilet是厕所的意思，用glass？)table behind them. The toilet table includes all of my glasses, sun glasses, and jewelry and so on. It is my dream room. I always see it in my dream. I hope that one day I will get it.

I’m very happy that can write my dream room(i can
write)

it would be turning real(it will turn to reality)

My dream room don’t need too big.(doesn't)

The wall color of the room is yellow(the color of the wall in the room)

is filling magic(is fill with magic)

a feeling of warm. (a sense of warm)

like a lamp in darkness (and also like a lamp)

puts all of my shoes( and put all of my shoes)

includes (can hold)

i always see it(指我的房间) in my dream.

我非常高兴能描述下我梦想中的房子。这就是我梦想中的房子：我希望有一天我能将这个梦想变成现实。梦想中的房子不需要太大，墙壁的颜色是黄色的，因为黄色是我之一喜欢的颜色，它能给人一种温馨的感觉，那种感觉就像阳光，像黑夜里的一盏明灯。卧室里，应该放着一盏水晶灯，我喜欢各式各样的用水晶制成的物品，特别是水晶灯，它能让我感觉到这个世界充满了魔力。在这个水晶灯的世界里，我要买很多的杯子，不同材质，不同种类，不同大小。它们会让我感到开心和兴奋。我要为我衣服的放置留个最大的空间，我要放四个带大镜子的衣橱。我还要在墙里面做个鞋柜，把我所有的鞋子都放进去，在后面，我要放置一个漂亮的梳妆台，我所有的眼镜，太阳镜，项链等等都要放在上面。这就是我梦想中的房子，我经常能够梦见它，我希望有一天我能够拥有它