哪位大神帮我改一下英语作文，跪谢。

1. Some parents think that their child should be allowed to use cell phones, for

2. mobile phones are not entirely harmful. To begin with, parents can easily keep in touch

3. with their child by cell phones. Meanwhile, if child have some emergency situations, they

4. also can tell their family quickly. Besides, a smart phone have a great number of

5. applications such as electronic dictionary, electronic book and surfing internet. Students

6. also can use these application to improve their learning efficiency.

    

7. Nevertheless, there are more reasons to support that instructor have the right to ban

8. moble phones. Above all, using cell phones can distract student’s study. Most student

9. play their cell phones during class rather than listening class, and they are also

10. cheating in their exams with mobile phones. That is very serious problem. Moreover, the

11. radiation of call phone is huge is issue to children, and it can affect teenager health

12. seriously. According to recent reports, radiation can cause DNA damage because the

13. defensive of teenagers is very low. Especially, long-term exposure would influence

14. mental function and improve chances to get kinds of cancer and other diseases. So we

15. should make students be away from cell phones.

Line 1   child→children

Line 2   mobile phone前加using;are→is;To begin with→Firstly;

Line 3   child→children;第二个child前面加their后，也变成children；emergency→emergencies；

Line 4   family→families；smart→andriod;

Line 5   surfing internet→surfing the internet;

Line 6   these application→these applications;

Line 7   instructor→instructors;

Line 8   ban后加using；most student→most students;

Line 9   listening class→listening to the teachers;

Line 10 That is →It is;

Line 11 call phone→cell phones; is huge is issue to→is a huge issue to;

Line 12 defensive→defensiveness;

Line 13 √

Line 14 function→functions;kinds of →all kinds of;

Line 15 be away→away

希望可以给你以参考，有什么疑问可以追问。

另外，我从你的文章里面看不出你要表达哪种观点，到底是可以使用手机呢还是不可以使用呢。主题不突出。这样要扣很多分的。

你已经是英语大神了，厉害。

Some parents think that their child should be allowed to use cell phones, for mobile phones are not entirely harmful. To begin with, parents can easily keep in touch with their child by cell phones. Meanwhile, if child have some emergency situations, they also can tell their family quickly. Besides, a smart phone have a great number of applications such as electronic dictionary, electronic book and !!!!!!can surf the internet. Students also can use these application to 1!!!!!!make their learning efficiency.

Nevertheless, there are more reasons to support that instructor have the right to ban moble phones. Above all, using cell phones can distract!!!!!!!!!!! students’ study. Most student play their cell phones during class rather than listening class, and they！！！！！ also cheat in their exams with mobile phones. That is！！！！！a very serious problem. Moreover, the radiation of call phone is huge is issue to children, and it can affect teenager health seriously. According to recent reports, radiation can cause DNA damage because the defensive of teenagers is very low. Especially, long-term exposure would influence mental function and improve chances to get kinds of cancer and other diseases. So we should make students be away from cell phones.