这是我的日记，跪求批改

2025-03-07 00:21:03

推荐回答（3个）

回答（1）：

Line3 home is an adverb(副词)，前面不加介词of
Line3 ……to do,bought改为buy
Line3 in this evening中，去掉in in supermarket要冠词
Line4 home is an adverb(副词)，前面不加介词to
After I had arrived home after I had finished had最好去掉

回答（2）：

I was the victim of a false alarm.I felt scared so much.
I went out of home to buy some food in a nearby supermarket in this evening.After finishing my task,I went back home immediately.then I played computer games.Just a moment later ,however,I found that I could not search for my keys anywhere.Worried and anxious,Iask my parent if they had seen my keys. But they said they didn't know.I felt even more anxious when I heared their disappoint words.My parents and I look for my keys with more care but we found nothing again.I felt really sad.At the end of the day,My Mum found them in my pants pocket.You can imagine how happy I was that moment!

回答（3）：

June 13 Monday，sunny
I'm the victim of a false alarm. I still fell terrible now and can’t calm down myself.
This evening I went out of home to buy some food in a supermarket.After I arrived at the supermarket, buying what I need and then I went back home.After I arrived home I played computer games.But unluckily I couldn't find my key any more after I stopped playing computer games. I cried out and rushed to my parents’ bedroom. I asked them whether they had any idea about my key. But they said they didn't know. Hearing this, I was very anxious. Finally, My parents and I found my key nowhere but in my pants’ pocket.
把里面的句子理了下，但是好像还是有点问题，关键是你的整个叙事不是很清楚，一些细节性的东西无法给你改出来，只能大致改一下

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