I wish to tell you, I would miss you once I hear this song.
第一个 想,我用了wish,更强烈表达一种愿望。
第二个 想,我用了miss,更符合英语习惯来表达思念。
还有,中英文语法上有所差异所以语序有调整
I want to tell you,when I listen this song,I will miss you.
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英语:I want to tell you, when I heard this song, I'll miss you.
法语:Je tiens à vous dire, quand j'ai entendu cette chanson, tu vas me manquer
我态度积极, 希望能得到悬赏分。
I want to tell you that every time when i listen to this song , i miss you very muchi
i would like to tell you i miss you when i listen to this song.