请英语高手帮我点评我的英语四级作文（语法，用词）非常感谢

2024-11-26 16:03:08

推荐回答（3个）

回答（1）：

1, 第二句中：are opened for free.
2,it has a purpose ? 此处最好用，There's a purpose 或者直接用状语从句：nowdays more and more museums are opened for free to attract the people ,especially the students to visit them ,which show the culture relics and the society's develop.
3."It is a beneficial activity."已经下结论？应该是 many people think .....
4 ,free admission have ? 单复数
5，第三段第一句为废话
6，it will lead to the order in mess,中应为 lead the order in mass
7,the public environment is also a serious problem that a part of visitors always throw away the plastic bottles and papers everywhere能看出我哪里改动来了吗？
8 So many workers who work in the museums think that the museums shouldn't opened freely. 中 who work in 去掉，将后面的shoudn't 中的not 提前为，don't think that 后面为肯定句。
9 I think the museum should open freely ,but it can limit the quantity of people every day. BUT 改为AND can -MAY .
10 最后一句中，who 应该去掉，visiting 已经是后置定语。后面的museums去掉。
如果总分25分的话，可以得12分左右。主题不清晰，是一大问题。

回答（2）：

我根据我的知识来谈谈这篇作文，首先说说我的水平，我是一个还没有考四级的大2学生
1）开头不出彩，不太容易给阅卷老师带来一种欣赏的欲望。一般第一句要使用一个长句出彩吧，但是千万要有把握，不能出错，否则适得其反！
2）It have a purpose that let more people ,especially the students visit those cultural relics and know the development of society.It is a beneficial activity 这句话中错误：have 要用has；这个句子你是想使用一个同位语从句，但是很遗憾，从句中缺少主语，students前面不要用定冠词，不是特指；and konw 我不大赞成，我觉得to know更好，不定式表目的。
3）整体来说这文章写得很大众，拿不到高分的.

回答（3）：

It have 都能用错，简直是。。。